i wish you... Hell?^^
"Jazz" is generally defined as european harmonies melting with african rhythms. Didn't hear anything of the latter in this song. it's nothin more than DAM-da-da all the time. kinda hurts my ear to hear drums being abused as a metronome. Also seems like not one single note was improvised.
overall pretty nice sound though. Just dont call it "Jazz".
But then.. about 95% of those songs submitted in the Jazz category have nothin to do with Jazz at all.
nice little loop you got there. you should try and make a song in this style.
just kill off this annoying sound in the background... ye know.. the one that sounds like rubbing glasses...
hahahaha... sorry I just visualize me killing a sound... literally XD
anyways, many people have ask for a song version, so I guess some day I will.
Thanks for the review VisionsOfDoom/.
yeah, quite relaxing and cool and stuff, but it's not really anything somehow. where's the melody? it's jjust a backing track for.. whatever. snow falling maybe.
and.. man, if you only use one drum beat in the whole song.. you could just as well leave the drums out. after 30 sec it just becomes an annoying background noise.
imho, this song needs at least 4 things:
1) a melody. perhaps played by a saxophone or something in that category.
2) harmonic diversity
3) rhythmic diversity
Some Constructive Criticism.
well... I really dont wanna be just the next one down here to say "great work, I damire your voice, simple but effective" blablabla etc etc etc, so I'm gonna try and find some BAD things about this song. Assuming you're still reading your reviews.
Okaay.. so I got a few points of critique.
The Song is waaaaay too short. You need some more minutes to make it more attractive! As a listener, when I#m listening to a Song with Lyrics, I want to be taken on a Journey, I want to forget the rest of the World for a while. 1min 46sec is NOT a while. It's 1min46secs. Baraely a moment in time, a biink of an eye. I need prolonged lyrical entertainment. And this Song needs at least 4-5 more stanzas.
MORE piano. When you make a Song with just ONE instrument, you can't just use it as a tool to lay some harmonies underneath the singing and play a few fills here and there... otherwise it just feels incomplete. And c'mon.. this Song DOES feel incomplete.
The Instrument you use needs to retell the story of the Lyrics; compose Musical phrases that mirror the Protagonist's feelings; the various changes the story undergoes until it's conclusion; phrases that emphasize the (at least two) different points of view the characters in your story have. Make it EPIC, not in the sense that word is used in mostly nowadays, but in its TRUE sense: Telling a story. That's what an instrument is supposed to do.
I do get it that this Song is intended to be a "fun" Song, and it totally sounds like one. But I kinda listened to about everything you put on newgrounds, and in my opinion the critique above can be applied to all of your works that are meant to stand by themselves (scores for filmmusic are something entirely different), so it kinda didn't matter where i posted this.
I totally dig your Song "Hypnotize" which is much more complete than most (Still not perfect, though).
I don't mean to be disrespectful in ANY way, I'm just offering some helpful advice for your future projects. I hope you get what I'm trying to convey in this (probably much too long) review.
I really do like your work and I hope you continue producing Songs on your current Level, hopefully even better.
- nice sounds
- good choice of instruments
- too repetitive for a 3min23sec piece.
- not really memorable, as it posses no melody, just the accompaniement. Ask someone to write a text and sing. Or think up an instrumental melody to top everything off.
- CHANGE THE F***ING GUITAR SOUND, it's bad beyond words, maybe you should even remove the Guitar part entirely, or replace it with something else.
Or, how about you let me record that part? I would gladly do that. Just contact me.
thats great, dude!
piano rock'n roll at its best...
du you happen to have the sheet music for this piece? if so, would you send it to me?^^
keep up the good work!
sounds awesome, really like how you use the thunder &rain to create atmosphere, the arpeggios in the beginning are quite fitting as well, like it when the melody and the cello come in, the bell adds some more color, nicely done
I would appreciate it if you could take a look at my submissions and maybe comment on them, since I've just been approved and noone has listened to them since, would be nice to get some feedback.
cheers! and keep up the good work!
ok... this is not classical. definitely. plus it's a remix, a nice one though. but the fact that it's a remix makes everything even worse.
sry but still 6/10 only
relax its a remix first, the original did not have a guitar nor a piano, nor the same tempo, and also its classical??? where have you been. clasical doesn't mean old, it means, acoustic intruments, commonly piano, strings, and brass, you see if there was an Acoustic genre I would of put it in there!
ok... the BEST way to make your guitar sound better would be to simply let me do it^^
anyways, scrap that yamaha and use a gibson. and turn up the bass. to FULL volume.
and you put more emphasis on creating a rhythmic feel by reducing the length of the notes (e.g. in the part that starts at 0:16), not letting the chords ring for several bars without palm-muting the strings. that always sounds quite messy to me. just think of a concise rythm and then hammer it on a tape.
and about the song, well it kinda lacks melody. it just sounds like a backing track.
I suggest writing a solo for the beginning of the song first 8 bars, until 0:16), as kind of an intro to provide atmosphere. and thats were the lyrics are supposed to start, and last for 16 bars until 0:48. that's were the C-part starts (right?). It kinda sounds like a break, which is a good thing, so you could simply leave it like that.
the part that starts at 01:58 sounds quite distinct, imo the guitar simply should double the melody of the bell-sounding thing.
hope I provided you with some good ideas, just keep up the good work this song has some real ass-kicking potential if you crank it up (a real good drummer would be nice as well).
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